I decided that in the beginning of my first essay I spent too much detail to the thought of originality and decided to omit this opening statement:
“In a whole is always following the person in front of them; from what they wear to what they do. It has become rare to see an individual stray away from the bounds of unoriginality, and this has also become apparent in recent works of art.”
I also decided to change the major body paragraph. I focused on too many steps on the monomyth and decided to focus more attention on just one particular step instead.
Here is the original body paragraph:
“The one common factor that both of these share is the monomyth structure that they both follow from step 1 entirely through step 17. Step 1 of a monomyth is entitled “The Call to Adventure.” In Pocahontas this would be when John Smith and his crew set sail to the “New World” in search of gold; and in Avatar this would be when Jason Sully and his crew set out to Pandora in search on Unobtonium. A few stages past this is entitled “Belly of the Whale” and is when the character separates himself from his past world and is willing to undergo change for the new one. John Smith and Jason Sully both undergo this as they acknowledge neither of them care what their crew’s intentions were in coming to the new place; Smith stops caring about the search for gold and Sully begins to care more about the people of Pandora than the quest for unobtonium. Step number six is “The Meeting of The Goddess” and step number seven is “Woman as Temptress” which both are highlight features of each story. Finally, the second to last step is entitled “Master of Two Worlds” which basically means that the hero becomes one, spiritually, or with the two worlds he or she has been living between. In Avatar this occurs when Sully becomes one soul with the “mother tree” of the land and all of the people from Pandora recognize him as a new leader and not as a foreigner. In Pocahontas, John Smith becomes at one entirely when he passes from taking the shot that would have killed the community’s chief. This heroic feat of his established him as a hero to the entire community that had also once only seen him as nothing more than an invader.”
And here is the revised paragraphs:
“The one common factor that both of these share is the monomyth structure they both follow from step 1 entirely through step 17. The most interesting, and strangely unique, step they both posses is the third step, Supernatural Aid. “Once the hero has committed to the quest, consciously or unconsciously, his guide and magical helper appears, or becomes known. More often than not, this supernatural mentor will present the hero with one or more talismans or artifacts that will aid them later in their quest.” (2) The supernatural aids within these two films are the leading ladies, the women who are from the alternate worlds. However, what is truly intriguing about this step is the shared talisman these women provide to their heroes. Within both Avatar and Pocahontas is a magical, spiritual tree. Avatar’s magical tree is known as “The Tree of Souls” or Vitraya Ramunong; it is a giant willow-like tree that is believed to be the closest tie to Eywa, the Na’vi’s god. (4) In Pocahontas, the tree is known as “Grandmother Willow” and is also a giant willow tree like that in Avatar; she is seen as an ancient and wise figure and provides advise to Pocahontas.
Pocahontas leads John Smith to Grandmother Willow one night. Smith is hesitant about speaking to Pocahontas’ father but Grandmother Willow suggests he should. She presents him with an analogy about ripples and says, “Ripples start small but quickly grow, but someone must start them.” (3) Her words of wisdom convince John to seek out peace by conversing with the Chief; however, he is attacked by Pocahontas’ partner and captured for execution. Grandmother Willow convinces Pocahontas to stop the execution, and in the end John Smith is saved and bark from Grandmother Willow is used to help heal his wounds. This magical tree is of aid to John because without her advice Pocahontas would not have stopped the execution. The last scene, where bark from her tree is being used to treat his wounds, is symbolic of her aid to John Smith.
Jake Sully’s crew in Avatar is after one thing and one thing only, Unobtanium; however, the largest deposit of this mineral lies directly beneath the Tree of Souls. As Sully changes his allegiance to that of the Na’vi he begins to do everything in his power to save the giant willow. The night before a battle between the Na’vi and the Americans, Sully connects to the Tree of Souls and asks Eywa to intercede on the behalf of the Na’vi. During the battle the Na’vi are experiencing heavy losses when suddenly all of the wildlife in Pandora join the attack and overwhelm the humans, causing a victory for the Na’vi’s. It is believed that the wildlife participating in the battle was because of the prayer Sully made while connected to the Tree of Souls. Without this spiritual tree, Jake Sully may have been killed or forced to return back to America and the Na’vi people would have lost their beloved willow and much of their land.
In both Avatar and Pocahontas, these magical trees provide much aid to each hero. They both portray wise figures that look over and guide each individual. Usually the supernatural aid within a monomyth is more tangible than the ones in these two stories, like the light saber in Star Wars. However; these supernatural aids provide just as much help and assistance as any other tool could. Using a magical tree as a supernatural aid helps set the monomyth of these two films apart from any other common monomyths.”
In my second essay I noticed I wrote too much about Katt Williams Biography and not enough analysis of his work, so I added these paragraphs:
In the same sense, Williams also loves to be the laughing matter of his jokes. He finds it naturally easy to give anecdotes about individuals with disabilities, because at the same time he is making more jokes of himself. In several of his skits he uses his small frame as the center of his puns. In one joke he is talking about his son’s love affair with cereal and slips in the joke that he’s “too f*****g short to reach it” he continues on about how absurd it is that he can’t reach the top shelf in his own kitchen. When telling the jokes about Oscar Pistorius, undoubtedly Williams feels as if he can relate because of his unusually small size.
Katt Williams also feels he can relate to those like Oscar Pistorius in many other ways also. Williams was handed several road bumps on the path to his true calling; his path to a career in comedy was not easy, he earned his fan-base and successful career by his determination and persistence, just like Oscar Pistorius did. Without mentors like Pistorius in William’s life, he would not have had the courage he needed to continue pursuing his God-given talent after the many setbacks he faced.